Fang Ride

I decided to cut out the rest of chapter 1 as it was much unneeded and boring. Please do take in to account that I do not plan my stories. ...

Hi. In my opinion, to be honest about 90% of Saint's pickings were that necessary. I read it and didn't think that much was kinda cliche. There was probbably a ...

I think it was great. The ideas you came up with like the weather and the Smart Missiles. The very start dragged on a bit, i think you could of ...

I think it was great, only a bit confusing at what Adias was at the start. There was no real explanation or opening to describe who everyone was. Some bits ...

Thanks, that was really useful. I'll try to do more reviews and work on what you said. That's probably the most useful review i've had so far.

James stared at the package in his hands; he never got mail, he was a slave. "C'm' 'ere boy! Every secon' that passes will be anotha whip for ye." Mr. ...

I think it's brilliant! Only the "quiet as a mouse" is a bit old. Other than that, Iwannareadmore!

Thanks for the reviews they were helpfull. Exept on quite a few things I don't agree with you, Saint. Actually it was a typo: "He rounded a corner and strode ...

December 19th, Oxford. His name was Ivan. He was a Russian hired assassin and he had one mission: to assassinate a fourteen year old boy. But there was a catch; ...

Hi Sky. Welcome to YWS. You sound just like me. I start writing something then i finish the book i'm reading and instantly want to write something else. Anyway if ...

Welcome to YWS! I recently joined and i'm looking for friends. The best things to do when you start are: 1) Post on welcome forum. 2) Click on everything to ...

I was a going to say the same thing. In a story you don't have an "evil" person but only someone who wishes to do things against the majorities will. ...

Well thanks for those, I'm going to make a rewrite. It was really a prolouge to a kind of murder mystery.

His name was Ivan. He was a Russian, hired assassin and he had one mission. This was about the easiest job yet, to murder a fourteen year old boy. But ...

I dunno. I dissagree with both of you and say you are being picky. I don't think there is anything wrong with it and must give a 10/10! I suggest ...